Under The Light of Thor

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On winter’s final note,
A blaze of chilly air,
Grasps at her throat,
All she can do,
Is howl at the moon,
In weeping throbs,
And sorrowful moans,

In wolfs fur,
In silver pelt,
Midnight’s veil,
A warrior,
A shield maiden,
Sword of steel,
Golden chariots above,
She sleeps under the light of Thor.

 

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8 thoughts on “Under The Light of Thor

  1. Jen, are you acquainted with Norse mythology (once so popular here in northern Europe, especially in Scandinavia where I live)?

    Is it Thor, the hammer-wielding god associated with thunder, lightning, and storms, you have in mind when you write, “under the light of Thor”? Or?

    And the “golden chariots” – are you referring to the old Greek sun god Helios, who is said to drive a golden chariot drawn by steeds? But if so, why do you write “chariots” (instead of “chariot”)?

    Of course you have your licentia poetica, Jen. But I’m a little curious because you seem to be so well-informed and well-educated. Would you mind telling us, your followers, about your educational preferences (that is what you already have studied and what you want to study and learn more about in the future)?

    It’s not easy to find good allegories and metaphors, but yours are, as usual, refreshing; and yes, I would even call them kind of innovative.

    Which is typical of a creative mind used to think with the help of both images and words.

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    • Sorry about late reply, for some reason this was in my spam folder!
      I’m interested in Norse Mythology. I haven’t studies it per say but find it fascinating and read about it quite a bit. I would like to learn more about Norse mythology. I have an interest in history.
      I am studying at university; writing and media. Almost finished, with only 2 more units to complete.
      Yes, I was referring to Thor. I was also referring to Freya. Who is often depicted riding a golden chariot. The chariot was pulled by two large blue cats who were a gift from Thor. I’m actually not sure why I wrote Chariot’s. My mistake.
      I hope that makes sense! Thank you! 🙂

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  2. But, Jen, if it was your intention to refer (also) to Freya/Freyja, where in the beautiful poem can I notice that?

    If you read this Wikipedia article about Freyja – see: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Freyja – there are many attributes you could have used to make it more apparent.

    I recommend you to, sometimes, be more clear and distinct in your metaphors. Generally speaking, poetry often becomes (even) better if the reader gets some (more) details to ponder.

    An exemple: When you write about “golden chariots”, the reader has to guess what you really mean. But if you had written about “a chariot pulled by two cats”, or mentioned Freyja’s famous necklace Brísingamen, or told your readers about the boar Hildisvíni (often depicted by her side) or if you had “seen” a falcon in the sky (Freyja possesses a cloak of falcon feathers), then we, your readers, would have gotten more “beautiful” or interesting details to ponder. And eventually, hopefully, we could have understood, “Ah, the gorgeous poetess is alluding to, hinting at, just Freyja.” Which, of course, makes sense because you are also alluding to Thor, another character in Norse mythology.

    Reading poems can, at least sometimes, be seen as having similarities to solving a crossword. The readers want to find the answer of the riddle posed by the crossword maker (or poet). Never underestimate the joy, or fun, a reader can feel when he/she is finding out the answer of the riddle presented to him/her, Jen.

    So, my advice to you is: Continue using many metaphors. You are very good at doíng that. But sometimes consider adding more details to them – to the benefit, joy and fun of your readers.

    And, please, don’t misunderstand my message to you (in this comment). You are not obliged to follow my advice. I just want you to understand that there are, usually, more than one solution to choose from in order to captivate the “souls” of your readers.

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    • Thank you for your advice and I will take it on in the future. You are correct in saying I should use more detail. I suppose sometimes I am too descriptive and then sometimes I want to be a little less descriptive, in allowing my reader to imagine and create for themselves. I do appreciate your advice. Thank you.

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